Can you tell me …

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Can you tell me …


why a man
walks out of his house,
and never returns?


why a woman abandons her child,
turns her back on her lover,
and looks silent at the wall?


why errant stars fall,
leaving their constellations
to wander the skies alone?


why an incoming tide
is an invasion of white water?


why each wave separates,
thrives for a little while,
then perishes on the beach,
wrapped up
in its lacy shroud of foam?

I have received several comments on these piece from various sources. So, following the lines of thought of my readers, to whom I am most grateful, here is the same poem, but with the verses re-arranged. If anyone would like to comment on the differences between the two versions, and which they prefer, I would be most interested (and grateful).

Revised Version
Can you tell me …


why an incoming tide
is an invasion of white water?…


why a woman abandons her child,
turns her back on her lover,
and looks silent at the wall?


why errant stars fall,
leaving their constellations
to wander the skies alone?


why a man
walks out of his house,
and never returns?


why each wave separates,
thrives for a little while,
then perishes on the beach,
wrapped up
in its lacy shroud of foam?

 

13 thoughts on “Can you tell me …

  1. Hi Roger! So happy you’re back. I like both versions – beginning and ending with the lines about the tide makes the second version, tidy (pun intended!) but the original feels more natural. 🙂

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  2. I imagine, Roger, that some people will find answers to your unsettling questions in their religions. For me, Nature and the workings of the Universe may know the answers, but I do not. The questions remain in our minds to create poetry – as you have done here.

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    • The questions are unsettling. They came to me one afternoon, sitting on the seashore (Passamaquoddy Bay, NB) and watching the tides flow slowly in, sewing lacy frills as they crept up the beach. Luckily, we don’t have to answer them … or I hope we don’t.

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